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Welcome to the boards! 

Here is a clip of one of my favorite songwriter/poets, performing one of his early classics on Fernwood in \'77...  My gamertag on Xbox live and psn is inspired by this song.  This man has had a profound influence on my poetry.


 

Shoestrings and sails
led us to separate shores
Eldorado  & Babylon
the mighty and small
stand statuesque or fall
cupp\'d in the palm of Time\'s
calloused clinching/unclinching
hand
a rhythmic reflex
to rise up & crush
the systemic epidemic
dream that is existence.

I\'m too tired to move mountains
when monumental efforts barely
move dumb lips, trained
only to feast fearfully,
never giving back
except when gorged
to point of vomiting.
Its easier, more remote
reliable to pushapen
trap thoughts on paper
spray-paint a grateful wall
leave graffiti on skin
trap insight in a bottle.

Save me Sisyphus
from monotonous 
endeavor.
Let me be
not much moved
by my own cleverness. 

Great read SpaceMonkey. The last four lines, in particular are my favorite.  I think the line about the stars could have its own stanza, maybe with another couplet to elaborate on the concept.  Also, a slight tweak in the wording of that line, might make the line agree with itsself a little better.  So instead of \"Even immortal stars are just an illusion,\"  you might say something like \"Even the permanence of the stars is an illusion.\"  The flow of the poem works pretty well for me.  The first two stanzas and the final one have a nice movement to them, and the couplet about the stars serves as a nice rhythmic break, which is why I  thought a second couplet would enhance both the meaning and the flow.  Great job!

this is the story of it--someone tries to sellthe poison as the cureand always the abscess of regret

politics and a toothache  the hollow hurt at the center of it allthe junkyard doggnawing the bones of hopepolitics and a toothache weeds crack the sidewalkthe good citizens shambledown nosy streets unawarethey are collared and countedby politics and a toothache the mouth is mangled mushmolars, incisors, canineshave long been pulledbut the ache remainsphantom, residual no mere dentist can extractthe politics of a toothache