Tyranny - a sonnet

[dragonwyst]

Tyranny Before the whistling, whetted edge of bladeDivides the silver thread of sense and soul,And life is left unfettered and un-wholeWith whispered urgings of the unheard shade;Before this dread and darkest hour of allThere is a thought that grows in strength of words,That finds a form in ink, like dark-winged birds Across a page that cringes at the fallOf pen-tip. Oh, that pen so wielded here!What power drips in ink on this bleak leaf,This strength to end the life of saint or thiefAnd keep the mobs immobilized in fear? Now, this I know: when faced with restless hordeThe lowly pen is mightier than the sword. 

[Chris]

This is absolutely brilliant!

Just reading you can grasp a sense of the art behind the piece, it\'s wonderfully crafted and beautifully written. So many aspects of it which make it appeal to me, that I couldn\'t possible choose a favourite part but I am one of those who are a sucker for a great ending. With that in mind, I would like to say how the unwinding lines to the final part really strikes a chord with me.

/profile/19-dragonwyst/\" data-ipshover=\"\" data-ipshover-target=\"http://poetryartonline.com/profile/19-dragonwyst/?do=hovercard\" data-mentionid=\"19\">@dragonwyst I\'m eagerly awaiting to read more of your work.

Thank you for sharing and giving your feedback so far to others, keep \'em coming!

[dragonwyst]

Thank you - the funny thing about this poem was that it was written in the intensely time pressured environment of a workshop on sonnets. i think I was the only person to emerge with a complete sonnet - and that was it - no rewriting or reworking required. Would be nice if that happened every time but most things need heaps of reworking. I confess I do drive my mother slightly crazy when I pull these things off at short notice like that (she\'s also a member of the same writer\'s group)

[HomesickAlienPoet]

I love the use of alliteration, the strong rhymes, and the overall flow of this piece.  Its a strong piece line by line, but my favorite part would have to be:
 \"What power drips in ink on this bleak leaf,This strength to end the life of saint or thiefAnd keep the mobs immobilized in fear?\"

This is masterful.  I look forward to reading more of your work! 

[FrostyKitten]

Very nice imagery! Looks like this form of poetry suits your talent well   

[stewart alexander]

very nice wording here... eloquent in its make-up// great lines.. There is a thought that grows in strength of words,That finds a form in ink, like dark-winged birds     looking forward to more!