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CHRISTMAS (deconstructed)

Started by mperry, December 20, 2015, 11:35:50 PM

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mperry

                   CHRISTMAS (deconstructed)
 
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for the story to start, the snow will begin to fall-silently, we cleave
 
search for a reference point, be re-awakened- ready to listen
 
as we close our eyes, take heed-prayers answered, if we believe
 
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comes a star, impossible to ignore, for there up in the sky
 
sitting stoic, to wait, shining bright-brightest- it comes to guide
 
a soul catchers dream-to lead a cause, no reason to ask why
 
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it demands our attention for on this night, be like no other
 
something magical-indefinable, comes created-heaven sent
 
a bless-ed event-for what\'s in a name, we take in, to be discovered
 
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for it is written, out of a promise made, vows broken through
 
disguised, for in whose name, we take his in vain-we will stray
 
deny him- or blame- still faithful, be drawn back, when spoken to
 
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ready to come when called, to believe-compromise, fall in line
 
give in to redemption, based solely on a miracle-the color of gold
 
yet from out of whose humbled beginnings, we see it, the divine
 
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that which makes a night-brought center stage, pierced by the cold
 
a mother and her child huddled-deep within a stable-unaware, they
 
show us- that we are guided by the simple words on a page-ages old
 
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in the hopes that some will follow-and let the miracles unfold
 
while others will cry-imposter- they demand his head- there is no peace
 
yet from out of this divide will come-as we behold- Christmas
 
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a faith-led by the nose-or based purely in faith- we will comprehend
 
what the heart will accept- becoming our picture of that first scene
 
a starry night-beheld we tremble, reflect-genuflect- praise his name
 
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for on this night-comes a child- pleading, to be heard- still, regardless
 
blaspheme , carry on-what does it all mean-for me, for you, your version,
 
or mine -what ever the belief system, for every one else- it is, Christmas
 
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By Michael Perry

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I\'m very distracted by all the dashes. Will you tell me what you intend them for? Are they supposed to be like line breaks?
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quite a piece... would sound good read out..  but.. as mentioned.. don\'t need the dashes.. but it didn\'t spoil it..    good writing  bud..
 
 
 
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mperry


Hello Cordelia
It is my attempt as a pause, or stop a thought, then to carry on.  I do use commas and periods in sentences and paragraghs when I write letters but for me when I write poetry, this is how I think it and write- I know it is unorthox, and for alot of people it is oft-putting, and I am sorry that it is difficult read- that is not my intent.  I will do my best in the future to keep your comments in mind when I post again.  Regards Mike

 
 

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mperry

Quote from: stewart alexander date=1450958466quite a piece... would sound good read out..  but.. as mentioned.. don\'t need the dashes.. but it didn\'t spoil it..    good writing  bud..
   
   
       
   
   
      a soul catchers dream ..   just wonderful..
   


Hi Stewart
 
 
 
As always, I appreciate your kind comments and feedback- it means so much!..regards Mike

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Quote from: mperry date=1451244116

Hello Cordelia
It is my attempt as a pause, or stop a thought, then to carry on.  I do use commas and periods in sentences and paragraghs when I write letters but for me when I write poetry, this is how I think it and write- I know it is unorthox, and for alot of people it is oft-putting, and I am sorry that it is difficult read- that is not my intent.  I will do my best in the future to keep your comments in mind when I post again.  Regards Mike

   
       
   


Mike, I was mainly curious as to the reasons behind the dashes. I enjoyed the piece quite a bit. The dashes distracted me, but now that I know their purpose they are less so.
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mperry

Hi Cordelia
 
 
 
Thank you for responding- I am apprehensive, and tentative each time when posting- seems everyone has a comment or question as to why I post the way I do- I only hope is that after reading what I post- you get what I present!. ...so thank you!....with regards Mike