Title: FROM A REFLECTION
Post by: mperry on
Post by: mperry on
FROM A REFLECTIONshadows are cast-forlorn over our backsmelting here and there-along-thisvacant stretch of beach-we cometo feel it-that loss-of our yearswe walk shivering-against the coldlost in our reflection-deep in thoughtour reminisce-as we let it goagainst-the pounding surf -echo- repeat-echoleft is undertow- submerge- unable to breathewe can\'t go back- so we walk on-througha simple refraction of light-turning day to nightwhere there is no trace-or doubt-remainingwe are exposed-given in-to the mood of the elements- a moon in denialfor whatever remained-between us- you and Iall will be buried tonight- with the in coming tide by Michael Perry
Title: FROM A REFLECTION
Post by: Chris on
Post by: Chris on
It\'s interesting to read something which doesn\'t follow your usual format (which I really admire). I was speaking to /profile/9-spacemonkey/\" data-ipshover=\"\" data-ipshover-target=\"http://poetryartonline.com/profile/9-spacemonkey/?do=hovercard\" data-mentionid=\"9\">@SpaceMonkey about this, since I don\'t really adventure much myself into other formats and styles - I find the way you write to be fascinating. It\'s something I haven\'t come across before, which makes your writing stand out.
This piece does have your mark stamped on it and I really enjoy reading your work.
This piece does have your mark stamped on it and I really enjoy reading your work.
against-the pounding surf -echo- repeat-echoleft is undertow- submerge- unable to breathewe can\'t go back- so we walk on-througha simple refraction of light-turning day to night[/quote]I find these part above to be very creative, I like the flow and way it jumps out (as I do with the whole poem).
Thank you for sharing it! Keep \'em coming!!
Title: FROM A REFLECTION
Post by: cheeky~k8 on
Post by: cheeky~k8 on
Its a good poem.My favourite part is;vacant stretch of beach-we cometo feel it-that loss-of our yearswe walk shivering-against the coldlost in our reflection-deep in thoughtI like the way you\'ve wrote it.
Title: FROM A REFLECTION
Post by: liam on
Post by: liam on
Good use of words which add visuals, I like that the most about poetry.
Nice work here.
Nice work here.
Title: FROM A REFLECTION
Post by: stewart alexander on
Post by: stewart alexander on
hey bud we are exposed-given in-to the mood of the elements- a moon in denial.....love that!some fab lines and feeling here... emotive! really like it...
Title: FROM A REFLECTION
Post by: mperry on
Post by: mperry on
[quote author=joey_matthews date=1444262874\">It\'s interesting to read something which doesn\'t follow your usual format (which I really admire). I was speaking to /profile/9-spacemonkey/\" data-ipshover-target=\"http://poetryartonline.com/profile/9-spacemonkey/?do=hovercard\" data-ipshover=\"\" data-mentionid=\"9]@SpaceMonkey about this, since I don\'t really adventure much myself into other formats and styles - I find the way you write to be fascinating. It\'s something I haven\'t come across before, which makes your writing stand out.
This piece does have your mark stamped on it and I really enjoy reading your work.I find these part above to be very creative, I like the flow and way it jumps out (as I do with the whole poem).
Thank you for sharing it! Keep \'em coming!! [/quote]Hi JoeyThanks for your really nice comments- I really appreciate them- everyone tells me I am an enigma of sorts- does not fit to a specific style- not sure if that is a good or bad thing- but I just write- it comes out the way it comes out- after many, many re-writes- although- I have written once or twice for a single write and not have to change a thing- but that does not always happen- so thank you- for caring enough to stop by and commenting- it gives me the courage to post another day!...regards Mike
This piece does have your mark stamped on it and I really enjoy reading your work.I find these part above to be very creative, I like the flow and way it jumps out (as I do with the whole poem).
Thank you for sharing it! Keep \'em coming!! [/quote]Hi JoeyThanks for your really nice comments- I really appreciate them- everyone tells me I am an enigma of sorts- does not fit to a specific style- not sure if that is a good or bad thing- but I just write- it comes out the way it comes out- after many, many re-writes- although- I have written once or twice for a single write and not have to change a thing- but that does not always happen- so thank you- for caring enough to stop by and commenting- it gives me the courage to post another day!...regards Mike
Title: FROM A REFLECTION
Post by: mperry on
Post by: mperry on
Quote from: cheeky~k8 date=1444301083Its a good poem.My favourite part is;vacant stretch of beach-we cometo feel it-that loss-of our yearswe walk shivering-against the coldlost in our reflection-deep in thoughtI like the way you\'ve wrote it.Hi Cheeky- Thanks so much for commenting- glad you liked it!...regards Mike
Title: FROM A REFLECTION
Post by: mperry on
Post by: mperry on
Quote from: liam date=1444414411Good use of words which add visuals, I like that the most about poetry.Hi Liam Appreciate the comments-thanks for stopping by- and sharing your thoughts-it means lot. Regards Mike
Nice work here.
Title: FROM A REFLECTION
Post by: mperry on
Post by: mperry on
[quote author=stewart alexander date=1444491999\">hey bud we are exposed-given in-to the mood of the elements- a moon in denial.....love that!some fab lines and feeling here... emotive! really like it... ![\":)\"](\"<fileStore.core_Emoticons "\\":)\\"")
/emoticons/smile.png][/quote]Hey Stewart Thanks for commenting-since I am a big fan of your writing- any good word from you - means everything!..regards Mike