This poem was written back in 2005, at the time I was eighteen. Inspired by real life, love and passion that /profile/2-cheeky~k8/\" data-ipshover=\"\" data-ipshover-target=\"http://poetryartonline.com/profile/2-cheeky~k8/?do=hovercard\" data-mentionid=\"2\">@cheeky~k8 has for butterflies.

Surrounded by trees,
Water and her.
I see a deeper paradise,
That only the butterfly can.

Freedom in movement,
She follows you around.
It\'s amazing to see,
How you stop,
When she holds out her hand.

Softly, you settle down,
Fluttering your shiny,
Blue wings.
I picture this moment,
Hoping I\'ll recall it forever.
She looked so happy,
So peaceful.

Then it ended,
So quick.
The butterfly flew,
As she looked on.

It felt like time had stopped,
When she set out.
To chase the,
Blue butterfly.

I like this! The way it tells the story is very fluid. Great job!

It\'s definitely a romantic poem! I like the image you paint in my head  Sometimes the rhythm is a bit off, but overall it\'s a nice poem that makes me think of a sunny summer day. Sigh, I\'m gonna miss summer!

Its a nice poem. It makes me think back to going around the butterfly area of the seal sanctuary in Skegness, there wasn\'t many blue butterflies there when we went years ago. Lovely poem.

[quote author=cheeky~k8\" data-ipsquote-contenttype=\"forums\" data-ipsquote-contentclass=\"forums_Topic\" data-ipsquote-contentid=\"66\" data-ipsquote-contentcommentid=\"399\">Its a nice poem. It makes me think back to going around the butterfly area of the seal sanctuary in Skegness, there wasn\'t many blue butterflies there when we went years ago. Lovely poem.[/quote]You don\'t recall the time the Butterfly landed on your hand when you held it out in my parents back garden?

That Butterfly seemed very peaceful, especially as it\'s rare to see them glide so gracefully and remain settled for more than a few seconds. I recall this moment because it was one of the happier memories from that point in our lives. /emoticons/smile.png\" alt=\":)\" title=\":) date=1442998149]

Thanks for the comments and feedback everyone.

that\'s really sweet buddy      love it!

Hi Joey Really nice write- with great images and nice word flow!..you wrote this at 18?...impressive!...thanks for sharing!...regards Mike

I liked this poem a lot.  I have read it more than a few times since you posted it.  It feels like a perfect snapshot, one you describe very well.  I feel like this is a fuzzy memory I have of my own.  I also think that if you were willing to submit this poem to an editing process, you could end up with a VERY respectable poem.  It\'s good now, but the potential for greatness is there as well. You sir, should write more poetry.

/profile/9-spacemonkey/\" data-ipshover=\"\" data-ipshover-target=\"http://poetryartonline.com/profile/9-spacemonkey/?do=hovercard\" data-mentionid=\"9\">@SpaceMonkey - Polishing my writing is something I struggle with, yet I will be taking my writing far more seriously and so you can expect to see more of it posted with in-depth/Re-working section.

Thanks everyone for taking the time to leave me your thoughts, it is appreciated.

This is lovely, Chris! It\'s been a joy watching you grow as a poet! 

Quote from: Call me Cordelia\" data-ipsquote-contenttype=\"forums\" data-ipsquote-contentclass=\"forums_Topic\" data-ipsquote-contentid=\"66\" data-ipsquote-contentcommentid=\"662 date=1443830989This is lovely, Chris! It\'s been a joy watching you grow as a poet! 

What she said.  You really have come a long way man.