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Quantum in Solace

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Quantum in Solace

 
 
When I am older,

will I have solace?

Will I see greatness,

happen before I die?

Or will my eyes,

still see hurt,

And tire of my unwinding heart?


Will my mind know,

equanimity?

When I am old?

Through time heals no pain.

It only creates holes,

in my mind,

Where the echoes of retention leave my soul.


And the sound of music,

reminds me of innocence.


And the sound of voices,

Remind me I am loved.

avatar_GoddessGlamour Puss

GoddessGlamour Puss

#1
Hmmm a very philosophical overtone to this piece I find almost making me feel I should launch into some intellectual debate response in answer to the opening question.
 
At first I found it to be rather sorrowful in tone pondering on a future that holds no peace just a cold and bleak reality devoid of the hope promised by the wisdom of aging. Yet the last 2 stanzas provide something of a light relief that lifts the peace and brings the philosophy of the opening almost full circle to leave a lingering sense that perhaps all is not lost and there is always solace to be found in the bleakest of times.
 
The only slight niggle I have is that perhaps YET would be a more fitting word choice for the penultimate stanza:

avatar_cheeky~k8

cheeky~k8

This is a good poem... different to your others years ago.
 
my favourite part is;
 
Will my mind know,

equanimity?

When I am old?

Through time heals no pain.

It only creates holes,

in my mind,

Where the echoes of retention leave my soul.

M

mperry

Hi Joey
 
Deeply- thoughtful and reflective...I enjoyed the read!!..thanks for sharing!...regards Mike

avatar_Call me Cordelia

Call me Cordelia

This is fantastic! I agree with Kate, it is different from your earlier work. Plus, I love the vocabulary throughout. Very deep and philosophical. Kudos for using equanimity, especially!!
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