Title: Quantum in Solace
Post by: GoddessGlamour Puss on
Hmmm a very philosophical overtone to this piece I find almost making me feel I should launch into some intellectual debate response in answer to the opening question.
At first I found it to be rather sorrowful in tone pondering on a future that holds no peace just a cold and bleak reality devoid of the hope promised by the wisdom of aging. Yet the last 2 stanzas provide something of a light relief that lifts the peace and brings the philosophy of the opening almost full circle to leave a lingering sense that perhaps all is not lost and there is always solace to be found in the bleakest of times.
The only slight niggle I have is that perhaps YET would be a more fitting word choice for the penultimate stanza:
Title: Quantum in Solace
Post by: cheeky~k8 on
This is a good poem... different to your others years ago.
my favourite part is;
Will my mind know,
equanimity?
When I am old?
Through time heals no pain.
It only creates holes,
in my mind,
Where the echoes of retention leave my soul.
Title: Quantum in Solace
Post by: mperry on
Hi Joey
Deeply- thoughtful and reflective...I enjoyed the read!!..thanks for sharing!...regards Mike
Title: Quantum in Solace
Post by: Call me Cordelia on
This is fantastic! I agree with Kate, it is different from your earlier work. Plus, I love the vocabulary throughout. Very deep and philosophical. Kudos for using equanimity, especially!!