I enjoyed this poem, but I was distracted from the words by two things: 1. The italics at the end2. That you used punctuation, but still capitalized the first word of every line (instead of following regular capitalization rules).I\'m not sure where you are wanting to take this poem, so take this with a grain of salt... but I think these lines:

Life is ablaze, a Passionate HeatLife is motion, frenzy, divine.[/quote]could be tighter if phrased like:Life ablaze, a passionate heatis motion, frenzied, and divine  

[quote author=Call me Cordelia\" data-ipsquote-contenttype=\"forums\" data-ipsquote-contentclass=\"forums_Topic\" data-ipsquote-contentid=\"6\" data-ipsquote-contentcommentid=\"664\">I enjoyed this poem, but I was distracted from the words by two things: 1. The italics at the end2. That you used punctuation, but still capitalized the first word of every line (instead of following regular capitalization rules).I\'m not sure where you are wanting to take this poem, so take this with a grain of salt... but I think these lines:could be tighter if phrased like:Life ablaze, a passionate heatis motion, frenzied, and divine  [/quote]Thanks.  I take all criticism with a grain of salt, I appreciate you doing it in a helpful and constructive manner.  Perhaps you could look at the second draft.  As far as capitalization rules, again thank you for catching that.  My rough draft had no punctuation and I added it before posting and forgot to uncapitalize them.  I am pretty ashamed to say I think it still exists like that in the 2nd draft as well.Also I am glad the italics distracted you, mission accomplished /emoticons/tongue.png date=1443831281]